Thursday, 12 August 2010

I Haiku: Do You?

I love it when I click on a post and straight away think Ooh, I could do something with that. Thanks! Take Rinda's post about haiku, for example. A challenge: a photo and haiku and I thought I would give it a go.

The photo was the easy part - I've been trying out the new close up lens my sister bought me for my birthday (thanks, sis!) and I like this one:


The haiku, a little harder. Actually, I think I made it hard for myself - I kept imagining my brother (the Literature Professor. Looks like it's family day here today) shaking his head sadly. He wears a cord sports jacket and drives a volvo, does an East Coast thing..but I'm losing my focus..

Back to the haiku. There's that rule about the syllables, then there's the contrast you need to create between the first and the second parts, and the focus on the senses..The more I thought about it, the more I thought - what a way to journal! Lots of layouts with the story caught in three lines. It might not be easy; but I bet it's effective. 

Ah, cool yellow rose
wrapped around morning rain
summer slips away



       

18 comments:

Winnie said...

Cool Haiku Sian! I don't think I've done Haiku since High School!!! Good idea about using it for journalling though. I might give that a try.

Karen said...

Stunning photo and beautifully described with your Haiku.

debs14 said...

I absolutely love yellow roses - this is such a great photo and the Haiku fits it perfectly.

darkpoetess said...

:-) nice haiku - love the air of sadness in it. poetry's been out of my life for a couple of years... time to bring it back in I think!

jennifer said...

Beautiful haiku Sian, love the way you've said 'wrapped around morning rain', rather than the rain covering the flower and being more dominant.

I saw this post of Rinda's too and have been mulling it over, but I'm finding the photo part of it difficult as haven't been snapping that much lately. Guess I should just photograph something around the house and go for it...

Deb said...

Well, Sian, your haiku is lovely. I am tempted to follow Rinda's lead on this post idea too...I suppose I'll start by choosing a photo and then work on the poem part. Like you, it's the part that intimidates me the most. :o) xo

Maria Ontiveros said...

Sian,
What a lovely haiku! I guess I've always just focused on the syllable part without realizing there are other parameters. I guess it comes from not having a sophisticated brother (LOL). Yours is incredible though!
Rinda

JO SOWERBY said...

what a beautiful rose, sister is obviously very sensible to buy essential tools for you. if u need any haikus to borrow i have a whole book
Jo xxxx

Denise said...

Love it,I might have a try myslef later - gorgeous rose too.

scrappyjacky said...

Beautiful rose,Sian...and great haiku...can't really get my head round them myself.But I do hope summer's not slipping away just yet!!

Ruth said...

I love how you've captured the essence of Haiku just by looking at that stunning photo. I must confess that haiku is a bit beyond me, though.

Carrie said...

Nice Haiku and the picture is beautiful! Funny we were just talking about Haiku's here - my 9 saying she found them hard and I was saying I almost felt like it was a free pass when they were our homework, lol.

Amy said...

Fabulous Sian, you have done very well! I'm just about to post mine too :-)

Karen said...

Absolutely lovely. The haiku and the photo.

alexa said...

Beautiful, Sian! I think your brother will be needing to take some lessons from you :).

Becky said...

Great haiku Sian and I love the photograph too :)

Scrappi Sandi said...

I have heard of haiku, Sian, but I've never had a go! Thanks for the link to Rinda's blog & challenge...I may just have to have a go at this one too! I love your rose photo & your Haiku is it's perfect accompaniment...methinks this could well be a fab way to journal too!

humel said...

I knew I'd love your haiku :-) I was sorry to have missed this challenge from Rinda, but I might have a go anyway, just for fun! xx

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